Elevator Pitch No. 2

I really appreciated the comment on my first Elevator Pitch because I hadn't even thought of how I would keep products uncontaminated behind the scenes. Luckily, someone pointed this out and I decided to add this to my new Elevator Pitch.
I decided, after realizing I had missed this detail, that I should explain my company in more detail in general, not just behind the scenes, in the kitchen, but also a more in-depth description of how a customer would go through my bakeries experience. I added what the store would look like coming in from the front, never having been there, and what my bakery would look like in the back, in the kitchen.