I was very happy to have very little negative feedback. The primary thing that many people commented to change was my use of filler work, like "um." I think I did a decent job on cutting back on these words this time. The only other consistent comment that I got on my last elevator pitch was to also discuss how I would pay for all of this. Obviously I couldn't go into too much detail in a one-minute video, but I did throw in a short little explanation on my thinking for this at the end. I really appreciated everyone's feedback on my last pitch and I definitely think it really improved this one (it definitely cut down on my time!), so thank you and I really hope to get even more great feedback on this one!
Maxine, you had me at "baked goods". I prefer extra gluten and sugar in mine though. I did pick up on a couple of "um"s and I would only recommend you slow down your speech just a little bit. You seem very energetic and passionate about your idea which makes a great pitch. Nice work. Here is a link to mine: http://guntotinghippie.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Maxine I wouldn't worry about what others think. You did a great job, and at least you did the assignment. I like how you thought of this business idea, and I agree with Michael about slowing down your speech a little bit. Great job. Please check out my blog here http://soulstosteal.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html Chris
Hi Maxine, love your idea because I did a similar concept: a gluten-free restaurant that caters to all dietary allergies and restrictions. The only thing that I can say is maybe work on the flow of your elevator pitch. Otherwise, the timing was perfect and it's a great idea! Here's a link to mine: http://maursfirstblog.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Maxine, I like how you took some of the comments on your last elevator pitch and focused this elevator pitch to help answer those concerns while also giving the audience an idea again about the company. I definitely agree with you about the time struggle. It can often be hard to figure out what is the most important information about the company and specifically what information is most important for the listener. 1 minute can go by quickly so you do not want to waste time on information the listener might not need or care about. Good job
Maxine, you had me at "baked goods". I prefer extra gluten and sugar in mine though. I did pick up on a couple of "um"s and I would only recommend you slow down your speech just a little bit. You seem very energetic and passionate about your idea which makes a great pitch. Nice work. Here is a link to mine: http://guntotinghippie.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
ReplyDeleteMaxine I wouldn't worry about what others think. You did a great job, and at least you did the assignment. I like how you thought of this business idea, and I agree with Michael about slowing down your speech a little bit. Great job. Please check out my blog here http://soulstosteal.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
ReplyDeleteChris
Hi Maxine,
ReplyDeletelove your idea because I did a similar concept: a gluten-free restaurant that caters to all dietary allergies and restrictions. The only thing that I can say is maybe work on the flow of your elevator pitch. Otherwise, the timing was perfect and it's a great idea! Here's a link to mine: http://maursfirstblog.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Maxine,
ReplyDeleteI like how you took some of the comments on your last elevator pitch and focused this elevator pitch to help answer those concerns while also giving the audience an idea again about the company. I definitely agree with you about the time struggle. It can often be hard to figure out what is the most important information about the company and specifically what information is most important for the listener. 1 minute can go by quickly so you do not want to waste time on information the listener might not need or care about. Good job